各位離岸網大俠們好，公司業績越來越差了，老大下令多開發客戶，這是擬好的開發信，望高手不吝賜教。

Dear Sir,
hello, I’m Ben, from XXX Corporation in HongKong.
I just visited your website and found that you are manufacturing (monitor and other related products 這里是客戶應用產品名稱).
And we believe you might be interested in our products.

XXX Corporation is one of the leading thermal solution company in HongKong.
We’ve devoted ourselves to providing high quality product in this field for almost 10 years.
XXX(公司名稱) can offer you not only customized fan but also various processing of heat sink.
For example, extrusion, die-casting, skiving and forge… etc. Besides, different specification of fans are always available for you.
You’re kindly invited to visit our website as (公司網站).
Please just feel free to tell us your demand quantity also along with the drawing for your wished product, then we will quote you the most competitive price for you.

We’re looking forward to hearing from you soon and establishing business relationship with you. Thank you.

開發信內容篇幅盡量簡短，并且能表明能我們提供的服務，以及尋求客戶回饋。不知這樣是否有符合？還請大俠們指教一下小弟，這樣我才會進步啊！小弟萬分感謝!